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If you guys haven't figure out my story is based on/a parody of, it's the 2007 Transformers movie.
I try to think on what was the biggest movie in the late 00s. The answer was the Transformers film. I could do a story based on that but it be tricky since I already did a story based on the 1986 movie which is in a completely different universe with certain characters dying. The characters who they were based on were introduce in the live-action movie universe. In the story, I had to revive characters(Traitor), or make similar related characters(Southern/Gunner and Doctor/Medic).
After the 1986 movie, season 3 of the Transformers series premiere with the Decepticons searching for their leader so the storyline of Villain being missing was easy to insert.
Ammo blasted everything that moved. On the next day, "I believe that some of the ROTC students survive." He sends a Giant Mutant Insect.
That sounds like the attack was very brief. Also, how did he not notice people survive his extremely brief onslaught.
Ammo never answered to Traitor on his watch.
Traitor's entire resurrection scene was quickly told in the intro paragraph in the story. That's terrible. You can't do an important scene as a piece of backstory.
The Evil Elf King didn't give Traitor his headaches originally. It was something I added because it does seem weird that Traitor is searching for Villain instead of ruling the Baddies himself.
The ROTC students seeing a black van wasn't in the original. The scene ended with them waiting for their ride.It was a school bus they were waiting for. I figure add the black van to have foreshadowing of the secret agency.
New Captain being stationed elsewhere in Arkansas wasn't in the original. I figure I should explain why there wasn't many Heroes like the 1st HvsB story and answering if New Captain is still the leader of the Heroes.
The Sophomore's body having high levels of glowing energy around his body is something I added in the recent version. The 1st draft said that the Heroes believe he may know that location of the Glowing Tennis Ball. It's never explain how the Heroes know that he or someone he knows (like his dad) has the ball.
After defeating Evil Cop, an evil goblin entered the room and try to eat the sophomore boy's face. I pulled the goblin off and kicked him across the football field.
I felt that was too random to introduce him. I figure I add an army of them invading Cabot's Secret Agency place later.
No, the locker battle with Evil Cop wasn't based originally based on (Not)Bruce Lee's locker room fight from Game of Death. As I was writing the recent version, I was sort of thinking of the fight from the movie and added the end where I kick the fazed Evil Cop into a locker. Gee, of all the 5 Bruce Lee movies I have to copy from, I copied from the one he's barely in. The original said I rammed Evil Cop into a locker.
Gunner and Medic were originally called Southerner and Doctor. It's just two people that have the same exact name as the other Southern and Doctor who died in the 1st HvsB story. I also rename them, Southern II and Doctor II. I figure just rename them and make them cousins of the old Southerner and Doctor.
The SWAT members of Cabot's Secret Agency never put paper bags on our heads and took us straight to the elevators that's underneath the police station. I found odd the place wasn't very secret seeing they just took us right there with our eyes open.
I also change the location because Traitor and the rest of the Baddies be fighting the police force above us who were unaware of the Secret Agency. There's no reason to involve the police into the story.
The original order was that the Secret Agency Father showed us Villain's body, The Baddies made the area shook, and then the Secret Agency Father told us the location of the Glowing Tennis Ball.
Villain met Traitor on the police station's rooftop rather than Sonic's.
The scene with football player from Buffalo, New York was based on the scene where Optimus fought Bonecrusher on the highway. Bonecrusher was based on this vehicle.
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Buffalo_%28mine_protected_vehicle%29
In my story, I look at the vehicle's name and decided to turn him into a football player from Buffalo.
The scene where the Heroes(minus me) met up between two trailers and Traitor coming in and blew them up wasn't in the original version. The story have Rapper got to the school before everyone else and saw Villain and an army of Baddies in front of him.
The scene where Rapper talks to Evil Cop and getting Armor's name wrong wasn't in the original version. The scene is based on the two biggest plotholes I noticed when I 1st watched the 2007 Transformers movie. Look at this 30 second video of the Decepticon roll call.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=dxPB6BNPf5Q
One is Brawl(the tank) was called Devastator. The movie made a mistake there. Everywhere else, he's called Brawl and the real Devastator showed up in the movie's sequel as the combined form of the construction vehicles.
The other plothole is Barricade(the cop) said he's heading towards the city but during the big battle, he never showed up. He was never to be seen in the 2nd movie but he finally showed up in the 3rd movie for a few seconds just before he got killed.
The Baddies shouted, "YES SIR!" They activated their jetpacks and flew in different directions. I don't think every Baddies has jetpacks like Armor.
The original had the sophomore couple with us the entire time after we grab the Glowing Tennisball from the Secret Agency.
The Helicopter coming to help wasn't in the 1st draft.
Villain explaining the Evil Elf King's spirit awakening him was a quick last minute decision on my 1st draft I made because it does seem weird for someone to wake up from a coma like that suddenly and especially with all of us there. Another reason is the Evil Elf King is based on a mix of Agent Smith from the Matrix and Elrond from Lord of the Rings. Take a guess who was the voice of Megatron in the 1st three Transformers movies. I didn't plan on this originally but I remembered who was the voice of Megatron when I was in the middle of writing the 1st draft.
Ammo didn't have the two Darth Maul toy lightsabers melded together.
I know in the movie, Sam was the one who stopped Megatron and not Optimus, but no one cares about a boring human. My story is about the actual characters everyone wants to see.
Traitor and any other survivors escaped. At the time, I didn't know which Decepticon survive other than Starscream(and Barricade wherever he went). For all I know, the Decepticons were badly damage and retreat to lick their wounds. Nope, they all died in the movie's climax.
The Sophomore couple wanting to make out on top of me with my friends watching is based on the ending of the 2007 ending. In the movie, the two humans lay on top of Bumbleebee and made out while the other Autobots watched. What was going through Bumblebee's head at that moment? If I was him, I tell them to forget it and walk away.
